IELTS Band 7.0 Model Essay3ーWritten by Sayaー
最近、イギリスの携帯・銀行・ビザについてのことを同時進行で行なっています。
特に、銀行口座ができないことには、色々な手続きが出来ないので、本当に困ります。
大学が裏で根回しをしてくれていたら良いのに、そういうことも無く・・・。
試練の連続です。
この件については、また今度記事にまとめたいと思います。
さて、今日もライティング！今回で第三弾になります！！
実は、このエッセー・・・山ほどあります。
全て私が作成したもので、ネイティブチェックを入れています。
なので、おそらくBand 7の質はあるものと予想されます。
ぜひ、勉強の参考になさってください。
<課題＞
Some people say that the best way to discourage smoking is to make smoking illegal in public places. Other people say that this is not enough and that other measures are needed. Discuss both these views, and give your opinion.
＜エッセー＞
The smoking population is numerous. However, some people insist that prohibiting smoking in public areas is the best measure to reduce the number of smokers while others think that there should be several approaches needed to combat this matter. This essay will discuss two views and state why I think other measures are necessary.
On one hand, removing smoking areas from public areas will reduce smoking opportunities. This measure will force smokers to stay away from cigarettes. In Japan, many public establishments have prohibited smoking indoors. Although public servants who are used to smoking indoors did not like this policy, it is reported that many of them succeeded in reducing the number of cigarettes. This exemplifies that depriving smoking opportunities of smokers is the most essential measure to tackle the problem.
On the other hand, others argue that cigarette addiction is serious that several approaches are required to decrease the smoking population. Scientifically, cigarettes contain an addictive substance called nicotine. To stop smoking permanently, smokers have to take adequate medical treatments to make their bodies free from nicotine. In some countries, there are hospitals which are specialized in helping smoking patients. In these hospitals, not only do doctors teach how detrimental cigarettes are to the human body, but they also control patients’ nicotine levels. Addiction cannot just be tackled by smokers’ efforts. They need professionals to assist them.
In conclusion, this essay has discussed both opinions on whether banning public areas into non-smoking is enough to reduce the number of smokers or not. While some believe this measure is beneficial because it will deprive smoking opportunities from smokers, others think smoking is addictive and that professional support is essential. Personally, I agree with the perspective that medical treatment is needed to decrease the number of smokers because addiction is one of the symptoms.
